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wrists

arms

legs

skin

[scars]

feeling of    i     don't
                                          know             what

                                                        to
                              
                                                                                            do

so help them
the ones who are being

BROKEN

fucking smashed shattered open

know the truth know love
hurts but it should never
hurt
like this people hurt but they
should never (.) hurt
like
this
it's unbelievable

find the words to say
or don't
just sit there
nod and say yeah yeah i know

because you do know
how they feel
and you do know
it's awful
and you do know
you're fucking useless

want to rip out your
spine
(it's twisted anyway)

bite_your_nails_  _   _   _   _   _

frustration
stress
misery
panic

maybe it's emotional instability
or maybe you have dysthemia
or maybe it's just school and
the fact that everyone you love
seems to be
miserable
and
going
under
and
hurt
and
wronged
and
you
can
listen
and
you
can
talk
but
you
can't
make
it
right.

you're supposed to be happy

but hey so are they

people are supposed to love
each other
and be honest with
each other not
break
each other

too bad life doesn't work
like sentence structure and 'supposed to' simply has nothing
to do with it

although if it did
you would be dead already

but them, they would be
happy

happy
happy
happy
happy
happy
happy
happy



this is my writing see it's dis
jointed
and unstruc
tured
and emotional and painful
cracks running through it
smash smash crash bang

oh don't mind that noise
just a murder and a couple suicides
and

someone withering
away
quietly

but

we don't

talk about that

here


see this is beautiful isn't it
can you feel it racing through you like
blood
thicker than
blood in fact water is thicker than
blood and you always hated water
anyway but lies are thicker than
water 'cause it's not so damn holy but
hope is thicker than lies
and so is depression
so thick it's like

air



is hope stronger than
pain
is hope stronger than
ache
is hope stronger than
i want to die
is hope stronger than
hopelessness
is hope stronger than
i hate myself
is hope stronger than
blood
is hope stronger than
tears
is hope stronger than
screams
is hope stronger than
silence

is hope

strong    er






?




.




this is my writing see it is pretty
see the girl she writes it is painful and disjointed and raw
it is pretty
is she pretty
the girl is she pretty is she pretty tell me is the girl pretty is she is she is she is she

the writing is pretty
powerful just how you
want it are you happy
now are you happy
now are you happy

now





{i always make pain
into something beautiful
apparently
are you proud of me
now
am i good enough for you
now
or do i need more pain
to make it better
do i need more pain
to be good enough
for you
do i need more
pain
because i'm sorry
but it
hurts
this pain it
hurts
and making it better isn't
always good
enough because it usually doesn't
change
shit}

[maybe wrists
are made to be
slit
and maybe spines
are made to be
twisted
and maybe love
is made to be
painful]
{if i have more
pain
and less
food will i be
beautiful
too}
[and maybe
people
are made to be

broken]


,
full title: "so they can fix themselves again"


you ever watched someone break? i don't mean, have you ever watched someone who was broken, or have you ever been broken. i mean, have you ever seen someone whole and happy be broken down into little pieces right in front of your ocean-wide eyes?


critique NOT requested. normally i'm happy with all kinds of feedback, be it positive or negative, but i didn't write this for it to be pretty (unlike my bitching might make you think).
i wrote this to feel like i could do something. anything.
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:icondarknightofhysteria:
DarkNightOfHysteria Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2016
This is a beautiful poem!! i love your work. <3
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Vherestorm Featured By Owner May 25, 2012
This is really really really good. Love it and it kinda helped me a bit :)
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012   Writer
thanks and i'm glad. :heart:
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SmarterThanEveryone Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Student General Artist
This is perhaps the powerful thing I've ever read.

Has this gotten a Daily Deviation yet?
Because it should.

And I have NEVER said that on any other piece before.
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towards-eternity Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012   Writer
:blushes: thank you so much, really. i'm so flattered!! :tighthug: <333
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SmarterThanEveryone Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Student General Artist
It was no problem- this poem was really impacting.
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addocdgirl Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012
I love this. This is really powerful and I love the style of it. I have broke and I have watched others break too and it really is hard. Amazing piece.
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Writer
i'm sorry i'm replying so late, but thank you, really. :heart:
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:iconaddocdgirl:
addocdgirl Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012
That's okay. :) You are very welcome.
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:iconmwruuruu:
MWRuuRuu Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Very powerful. I love the imagery you create, not just with your words but the literal format. Great work!
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011   Writer
thank you! <33
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GaarasSand101 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011
i am going through my childhood best friend breaking right now, IT SUCKS!!!!!! i feel so helpless i dont want her to feel like that! i dont want anyone to feel like that! its shitty!
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011   Writer
:heart: i'm sorry. stay strong for both of you, and remember to not let her pain overrule you completely, keep a bit of distance.
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GaarasSand101 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011
ok thank you! :heart:
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LadyUndone Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:aww:
you've been featured in my journal
[link]
hope you don't mind
:heart:
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2011   Writer
thank you so much!! :hug:
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:iconjeska-the-creepy:
Jeska-The-Creepy Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011
I broke in front of my two best friends. Never felt so guilty about anything.
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2011   Writer
:heart: breaking isn't normally something you can help, and friends are supposed to be there in part to support you when the going gets tough. you really don't need to feel guilty about it.
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Ailysha Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is just... stunning. It's so full of emotion, and I know exactly how it feels. You just found the perfect words, and I just love your writing style! <3
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towards-eternity Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011   Writer
thank you so so so much!! <333
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Ailysha Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!^^
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Sora-Girl-9 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011  Student Writer
oh don't mind that noise
just a murder and a couple suicides
and
someone withering
away
quietly
but
we don't
talk about that
here
That's awesome. :o
And I love the "And hope is greater than" part.
No, have you seen someone break?
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2011   Writer
thank you!! <33
yeah. although she seems to have gotten herself back together again, so i'm not complaining. (:
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Sora-Girl-9 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2011  Student Writer
You're welcome, and that's good. c:
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Lemon711 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You knocked me over with your words - absolutely stunning!
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towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011   Writer
ah, thanks a million!! (= :huggle:
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Lemon711 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: You're welcome dear!
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9MR-SELF-DESTRUCT Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011  Student General Artist
The fact that I can relate to this piece is simultaneously depressing, reassuring, inspiring, and terrifying. Thank you.
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towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011   Writer
thank you. :heart:
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9MR-SELF-DESTRUCT Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Student General Artist
My pleasure.
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JacktheAngelofNothin Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
perfect
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011   Writer
:hug:
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RequiemsandReveries Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
Suffice it to say: wow and ditto
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2011   Writer
thanks. <3
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Femme-Fatale333 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
With good poetry, you can usually go on about the impact and the devices you liked and what you found meaningful. With incredible poetry you find yourself staring at the screen for five minutes, trying to find words that won't come cause you've just been shocked into numbness by the purity and how incredible it was. Thank you for stealing my five minutes. Its been a long time.
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towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2011   Writer
thank you so so much. <33 (=
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Femme-Fatale333 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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maidenofwar Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011
:heart:
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011   Writer
:hug:
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xox-Charlie-xox Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011
this was amazing, i envy you so much. i wish i could express emotion like that
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011   Writer
thanks <3 and i'm about to sound like a living breathing cliche right now, but practice makes perfect ;)
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xox-Charlie-xox Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011
haha, sadly cliche's often exist because they make sense xD
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011   Writer
...true. after all, where there's smoke there's fire. ^^
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MadeAnew Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2011  Professional Writer
This is fantastic. Sorry for the feelings behind it though. I know what this feels like and its not fun, but you really do need hope, because once you figure out how to fixate yourself on a positive mindset you will be able to help yourself get out of the mess. Its a really long road but its worth it, Hope is definetly powerful. :)
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towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011   Writer
thank you so much. :heart: and, well, i do normally have hope, it just...has its off days. :s
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:iconmadeanew:
MadeAnew Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Professional Writer
Of course, We all have off days :) Its really no problem/ ^^
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NicoleKeller Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2011  Student Photographer
I honestly wish I could find a word for this. It's not just "pretty." It's like the essence of life in solid, liquid, sharp, amazing words. I know I probably sound a little much at saying it this way, but I just want to stress to you how much I felt while reading this. The sentence structure imitates the feelings you get as you crash through words, truths, sometimes stopping to breath, other times to let it breath on you.
I know critique was not requested, but I just wanted to tell you.
There is a word in Congolese called nomma. It literally means "word" but it is also the suffix of the words of all living things. Something is not alive unless it has been given nomma.
This poem exploded to life infront of me, and I love it.
I know how it is to watch someone break.
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towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011   Writer
holy shit.

thank you so so so so so so much. that was one of the best comments i've ever received. seriously. <33333 :tighthug: C=
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NicoleKeller Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Student Photographer
:aww: :tighthug:
Just saying what comes to mind.
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:icontowards-eternity:
towards-eternity Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011   Writer
well you have quite a mind. ;) :heart:
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